I have a few Blurbs and would like you to take a look and let me know which one you like the best, and or if you might come up with one that would be as good. thanks
Jake Shepard’s normal life changed overnight when he found a mysterious glowing ball of liquid light in the woods. After he touched the liquid light it burst into a mist and sprayed all over him and then it was gone. From the mysterious liquid light he soon learned that he has amazing abilities Learning about new-found abilities, Jake kept a journal to record what happened as his life unfolded around him. He discovers how evil the world can be from people that wants to come out at night. In a bid to try put a stop to the evil that he encounters, he teams up with a secret agencies only to discover a new threat of forgotten creatures that can end the human race and be the new species of the planet.
Can Jake learn where the creatures came from in his bid to stop them? Will his new abilities be enough to stop the greatest threat that mankind has ever faced. Follow Jake’s journal, in his flight to try to end the new threat of mankind and learn about his discovery.
tell me what you think of this blurb,thanks
Second Blurb ,It is close to the first one.
Jake Shepard’s mundane life changed overnight when he found a mysterious glowing ball of liquid light in the woods. After he touched the liquid light it burst into a mist and sprayed all over him and then it was gone, Jake Shepard was a young man of his late 20s. From the mysterious
liquid light he soon learned that he has amazing abilities. Learning about new-found abilities, Jack kept a journal to record what happened as his life unfolded around him. He discovers how evil the world can be from people that wants to come out at night. In a bid to try put a stop to the evil that he encounters, he teams up with a secret agencies only to discover a new threat of forgotten creatures that can end the human race and be the new species of the planet.
Can Jake learn where the creatures came from in his bid to stop them? Will his new abilities be enough to stop the greatest threat that mankind has ever faced. Follow Jake Shepard’s journal, in his flight to try to end the new threat of mankind and learn about his discovery.
Which liquid ball of light do you like best.
